Do All Girls Realy Love Poetry .. If So Read Mine And Tell Me If Its Any Good.?
Posted on 21. Nov, 2009 by in Q&A
Each day I see you brings me joy.
A day without you I would parish.
Your beauty is like a sunset full
of light and color.
Your lips are softer than a babys skin.
Your Elegance could not be compared but only
to that of a field of flowers.
What does that make you feel like?
ssjbroli
Nov 21st, 2009
most girls like it, but i don’t think guys are suposed to, unless they’re gay
gildamcg
Nov 21st, 2009
i don’t like poetry for some reason..sorry!
Jimmy The Hand
Nov 21st, 2009
The world needs more poets, so keep up the good work.
Writing poetry is like learning an instrument. The more
you do it the better you get, and the more you expose
yourself to the work of others the more you learn.
Poetry need not rhyme…good “prose” can be very powerful.
View my work on my yahoo 360 and let me know what you think.
A 360 site would be an excellent way to show your works too.
Good Luck
Jimmy
Bebop
Nov 21st, 2009
That was pretty!
I’m not really a poetry kind of girl.
DanFan
Nov 22nd, 2009
It depends… some girls really love poetry and some aren’t into the (this may sound childish) gooey love stuff. I liked your poem, i think it is very… poetic. The poem doesn’t really make me feel like anything… but happy for the lucky girl who is going to get it!
Oh… and thanx for answering my question!
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Nov 22nd, 2009
It is very sweet and touching. She will like it
chicotyl
Nov 22nd, 2009
wow I got goosebumps yeah great
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Nov 22nd, 2009
whew! so special..:)
nice nice!
lilith
Nov 22nd, 2009
I’d like it better if you said “your lips are soft like rose petals”, who wants to think about babies when their being romanced- other than that I liked it!
sunraeon
Nov 22nd, 2009
Your poetry is written in a somewhat unique style.I read it a few times.If I am honest,I have to say,it’s ok,I’d say you either need to try and rhyme a little more or change some of your words to give it a little more meaning.Sorry I couldn’t be more helpful.If I told you how I would change it then I would be writing for you.This must be your work alone. I will say it sounds like you have a good start,add a few more lines to give it more meaning. Practice makes perfect.
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Nov 23rd, 2009
how bout- without you I am nothing.
BoO
Nov 23rd, 2009
ahh! makes me feel special! lol really its good stuff! sweet!
pinneapp
Nov 23rd, 2009
its good. but i agree with the others. change the whole lips as soft as baby’s skin thing to something more romantic. oh, and also add in somehting about eyes. that is what would get me. your poem is really nice. ~
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Nov 23rd, 2009
Beautiful.
When my hubby writes things like that for me…
guaranteed, I feel special!
p.s. I wouldn’t change it any. : )
greeneye
Nov 23rd, 2009
Sorry it made me and my daughter laugh.
You need to use words to show more emotion, try rhyming.
Each Day I see you brings me joy,
You are my love, my pride, and joy
A day without you I would parish,
I cherish each day we share,
Your beauty is like a sunset full or light and colour,
Your beauty fills me with light which nothing can compare,
Your lips are softer than a baby’s skin,
The softness of your lips brings me delight,
You Elegance could not be compared but only to that of a field of flowers,
Your elegance and grace is wonderful to see,
Lets walk in to our field of flowers and lay together in the breeze.
It’s a bit sappy but if you like that sort of thing is flows better.
Good luck and my advise is write your feelings in the morning or last thing at night. A few days later read it out loud to yourself and you will know where or what words to change.
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Nov 23rd, 2009
it’s great except the part of baby skin you might want to change that bit ok.
but yes it sounds pretty good to me.
garinger
Nov 23rd, 2009
Not all girls like poetry. But I love poetry, I happen to write alot of it myself. I have even had a good portion of it published. In the last couple of years my collection has accumulated about 400 poems. It has been awhile since I have written anything new, but I can only write when I am depressed.
I like alot of poems that rhyme.They just seem to fit together bett. But yours was a pretty poem.
***NOTE: Just becuz guys like poetry, it doesnt make them gay. You can look at it as being song lyrics just the same as poetry. Does that mean male rock stars are gay?!! I dont think so.***
polkadot
Nov 24th, 2009
both girls and guys can like poetry. it means they are deep. ure not gay. dont listen to him. he’s probably gay. but seriously. i wouldnt mind if a guy wrote a poem for me. even if it doesnt makes sense, if its korny, whtever. it jsut shows that he likes to be romantic. and that he likes to let out his feelings about someone or something in a poem. dont worry. oh yeah. ure poem was cute
Bartmoob
Nov 24th, 2009
On the one hand, perhaps you should not try a career in poetry (then again, I’ve seen published poems that yours just blew away, so what do I know?)-BUT-if someone wrote that for ME, I would just be thrilled, melt totally. It’s the personal nature of it, that you did this for her, & just for her, more than anything else, that counts. Go for it, she’ll adore it.
southern comfort
Nov 24th, 2009
I am a writer..and I think that was a very heartfelt poem..It makes me feel like I wish a guy would write that to me.
sweetgur
Nov 24th, 2009
like romance is in the air. I thought it was beautiful
hottie
Nov 24th, 2009
I loved it
I write poetry my self
and yours is good
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Nov 24th, 2009
everyone loves ones praise in a proper way…. girls or boys. but boys want to pretend tough and straight… boys dont cry
Samara
Nov 24th, 2009
It’s simple but more than enough to make a girl swoon…
bea
Nov 24th, 2009
lips softer than a babys skin…..hmmm…..exxagerated
The Killer Tomato
Nov 25th, 2009
I agree with crabs, but I also would change the second line, too. It’s to dark.